Jane Schaeffer Writing Program - PBworks

Jane Schaeffer Writing Program - PBworks

How to write an Effective Response to Literature Essay JANE SCHAFFER WRITING PROGRAM GET READY TO COLOR YOUR WORLD! Materials: Blue, red and green pensfor those of you who need it! BLUE is for Topic Sentences (TS) and Concluding Sentences (CS). RED is for Concrete Details (CD). GREEN is for Commentary Sentences (CM).

SHAPING THE ESSAY- TERMS TO KNOW One-Chunk Body Paragraph Sent. #1 -Topic Sentence TS Sent. #2 CD starts with For example Sent. #3 CM - (This shows that) Sent. #4 CM (It also indicates; This is because; This is important because) Sent, #5 Circle Sentence CS Sums it up and ties back to the thesis (As a result, ) SHAPING THE ESSAY- PARAGRAPH A Topic Sentence TS = first sentence of the paragraph. It shows the main

idea. Usually a mildly controversial statement. something that you have to prove is true or valid. Also called an assertion or claim. TS EXAMPLE In Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone, Harry is a champion to many of the more insecure students at Hogwarts. SHAPING THE ESSAY- PARAGRAPH Concrete Detail (CD)

This is the stuff from the literature its the evidence the WHAT for your commentary! Plot References facts, examples from story (what happened), support Include citations (with page numbers) Quotes / paraphrasing both are okay

Use quotes when there is something special about the lines. CDs cant be argued witha CD is evidence that supports your point! CD EXAMPLE For example, when Malfoy takes Nevilles Remembrall, Harry gets on a broom and gets it back. SHAPING THE ESSAY- PARAGRAPH Commentary (CM)

This is the stuff from inside your head! This is the answer to so what? or What does this mean? or Why is this important/significant? Your words and explanations. May be referred to as: analysis, interpretation, ideas, inference, insight, reason, commentary, elaboration EXAMPLE COMMENTARY SENTENCES (2 CMS)

He simply cannot stand someone who picks on others. Because of this, Harry becomes a hero to those less fortunate. SHAPING THE ESSAY- PARAGRAPH CONCLUDING SENTENCE A CS wraps up the paragraph. All commentary No new CD introduced It rephrases the main idea. EXAMPLE CONCLUDING SENTENCE (CS)

In other words, he has found a place where he belongs, and he becomes determined to protect the vulnerable people he has grown fond of. TS, CD, CM, CSNOW WHAT? CHUNKING A combination of CDs and CMs is called a chunk. In English, we will mostly use a combination (or ratio) of 1:2. That is, for every 1 CD, you will have 2 CMs. Other subjects have different

One Chunk: 1 CD + 2 CM For example, when Malfoy takes Nevilles Rememberall, Harry gets on a broom and gets it back. He simply cannot stand someone who picks on others. Because of this, Ratio Harry becomes a hero to= 1:2 SHAPING THE ESSAY- CHUNK One-Chunk Body Paragraph Sent. #1 -Topic Sentence TS Sent. #2 CD starts with For example Sent. #3 CM - (This shows that) Sent. #4 CM (It also indicates; This is

because; This is important because) Sent, #5 Circle Sentence CS Sums it up and ties back to the thesis (As a result, ) A WHOLE PARAGRAPH CM X 2 TS In Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone, Harry is a champion to many of the more insecure students at Hogwarts(TS). For example, when Malfoy takes Nevilles Rememberall, Harry gets on a broom and gets it

back(CD). He simply cannot stand someone who picks on others(CM). Because of this, Harry becomes a hero to those less fortunate(CM). In other words, he has found a place where he belongs, and he becomes determined CS CD A VISUAL A Topic Sentence (TS) is the top bun of a hamburger. Concrete Details (CD) are the meat of the hamburger. Commentary Sentences (CM) are the extras on the hamburgerthe tomato, cheese,

lettuce, bacon, mayothey make it delicious! A concluding sentence (CS) is the bottom bun of the hamburger. SHAPING THE ESSAY- TERMS TO KNOW Chunk 1 CD and its accompanying CMs x two Two for One Ratio Ratio of CD:CM in a body paragraph should be at least 1: 2+

Flexible order of CDs and CMs: cm, cd, cm, cm cd, cm, cm Develop as you improve cm, cm, cd, cm SHAPING THE ESSAY- YOUR TURN Turn your paper over and read the 1 chunk paragraph on The Three Little Pigs.

Using your colors, underline/highlight each element of the paragraph. Identify (write)each element of the chunk paragraph like we did with Harry Potter. THE THREE LITTLE PIGS In the fairy tale The Three Little Pigs, the third pig is very wise. For example, remembering his mothers warning about a wolf, he builds his house out of sturdy brick. Because the wolf is unable to blow down the brick house, the third pig demonstrates his superior intelligence. The third pig evades his brothers fate by choosing a better building material, and avoids being eaten by the wolf. In conclusion, the third pig outsmarts not only his brothers but the big, bad wolf as well.

BLOWING CHUNKS #2 1. Using your colors, underline/highlight each element of the paragraph 2. Identify each element of the paragraph like we did with The Three Little Pigs. BLOWING CHUNKS # 2 In the poem The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock, the main character feels self-conscious in a world that seems

to move too fast for him. At the beginning of the poem, Prufrock invites the reader to follow along with him, but twice during his introduction of his topic, he is interrupted by women who come and go/ Talking of Michaelangelo (658-9). These anonymous women interrupt Prufrock, distracting him from his point, even though what they are discussing has no relationship to what he is attempting to say. They pass him by, while he attempts to reorganize his thoughts by changing the subject, and thus continually playing catch-up to the world around him. Prufrocks inability to fully communicate his ideas makes him feel isolated and ineffective in a world that seems disconnected from him. BLOWING CHUNKS # 2 In the poem The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock, the main character feels self-conscious in a world that

seems to move too fast for him. At the beginning of the poem, Prufrock invites the reader to follow along with him, but twice during his introduction of his topic, he is interrupted by women who come and go/ Talking of Michaelangelo (658-9). These anonymous women interrupt Prufrock, distracting him from his point, even though what they are discussing has no relationship to what he is attempting to say. They pass him by, while he attempts to reorganize his thoughts by changing the subject, and thus continually playing catch-up to the world around him. Prufrocks inability to fully communicate his ideas makes him feel isolated and ineffective in a world that seems disconnected from him. SHAPING THE ESSAY- YOUR TURN

One chunk is fine for middle school we are in high school More complex points need more support. Thus, you will mostly write two-chunk paragraphs. Topic Sentence still at the beginning and a Concluding Sentence still at the end. Includes two chunks with a transition between them that connect the chunks. TS + (cd, cm, cm) + S + (cm, cd, cm) + CS BLOWING CHUNKS #3: LAS VEGAS

Las Vegas is the most surreal city anywhere in the world. For instance, the center of the city is full of different kinds of buildings including a two-thirds scale Eiffel Tower, a giant black glass pyramid, a scaled-down replica of the New York skyline, and a faux Medieval castle. The whole place reminds me of a big amusement park like Disneyland with its different lands.Its as if each building was constructed in isolation without any consideration of the other buildings. In addition, this center is surrounded by a sprawl of suburbs housing close to two million people and stretching out into the desert. I always wonder what made so many people want to live in such an inhospitable place. All those people and houses almost seem as if they traveled across the wasteland and gathered to pay homage to the weird buildings in the center. Las Vegas is such a strange city, it is hard to believe it actually exists unless you actually go there and experience it for yourself. BLOWING CHUNKS #3: LAS VEGAS

(T)Las Vegas is the most surreal city anywhere in the world. (CD)For instance, the center of the city is full of different kinds of buildings including a two-thirds scale Eiffel Tower, a giant black glass pyramid, a scaled-down replica of the New York skyline, and a faux Medieval castle. (CM)The whole place reminds me of a big amusement park like Disneyland with its different lands.(CM)Its as if each building was constructed in isolation without any consideration of the other buildings. (CD)In addition, this center is surrounded by a sprawl of suburbs housing close to two million people and stretching out into the desert. (CM)I always wonder what made so many people want to live in such an inhospitable place.(CM)All those people and houses almost seem as if they traveled across the wasteland and gathered to pay homage to the weird buildings in the center.(CS)Las Vegas is such a strange city, it is hard to believe it actually exists unless you actually go there and experience it for yourself.

A pause for TRANSITIONS A good paragraph will also use transition words. These are words or phrases that help readers connect ideas. Example transitions: For example, For instance, Consequently, Thus, In summary, Because of this, As a result,

Hence, Therefore, THREE LAYERS For a more complex paragraph, you have three chunks: Topic sentence CD = Support (hamburger patty) CD = Support (hamburger patty)

CM = Expansion (cheese) CM = Expansion (pickles) CD = Support (hamburger patty) CM = Expansion (special sauce) CM = Expansion (catsup) Concluding Sentence CM = Expansion (lettuce) CM = Expansion (tomato)

BLOWING CHUNKS # 4: NEW PIGGY In the fairy tale The Three Little Pigs, the third pig has the traits that help him succeed. For example, he is wise and builds his house out of sturdy brick. The wolf is unable to blow down the brick house. This shows that the third pig is smarter than his brothers, who were both eaten by the wolf. Additionally, he is a hard worker. Although it is much easier to build a house out of straw, he chooses the material that will hold up. Even though laying bricks is time-consuming, he knows it is the better choice. This oldest pig also learns his lessons. He remembers his mother taught him that predators seek out little pigs. Knowing a wolf-attack is likely, he plans out his home construction to prevent tragedy. In conclusion, the third pigs nature enables him to outsmart not only his brothers, but the big, bad wolf as well. BLOWING CHUNKS # 4: NEW PIGGY

(TS) In the fairy tale The Three Little Pigs, the third pig has the traits that help him succeed. For example, he is wise and builds his house out of sturdy brick(CD). The wolf is unable to blow down the brick house(CM). This shows that the third pig is smarter than his brothers, who were both eaten by the wolf(CM). Additionally, he is a hard worker(CD). Although it is much easier to build a house out of straw, he chooses the material that will hold up(CM). Even though laying bricks is time-consuming, he knows it is the better choice(CM). This oldest pig also learns his lessons(CD). He remembers his mother taught him that predators seek out little pigs(CM). Knowing a wolf-attack is likely, he plans out his home construction to prevent tragedy(CM). In conclusion, the third pigs nature enables him to outsmart not only his brothers, but the

LEAD-INS Lead In: Sentence that provides context to a quote. successfully incorporate a quote in your CD, you need to use a lead-in. One main rule: Quotes do not exist as their own sentence. Ever. Lead-ins serve an important purpose

Support your point Give your quote context Provide flow and connection in your writing AN EXAMPLE George is distraught after the death of Lennie. Sometimes you just haffta, you just haffta (57). As a reader, the above example is confusing and awkward What starts out as a decent plot reference is

suddenly interrupted by a random quote The reader does not know: where the quote comes from who says it whats going on in the book when the line is said AN IMPROVEMENT After the death of Lennie, Slim recognizes Georges need for reassurance and sympathetically confides, sometimes you just haffta, you just haffta (57).

This example works much better In the lead-in to the quote, the author provides enough context so that the reader knows exactly- who says it how its said when it occurs

Note how when its read, the quote fits smoothly into the authors own original sentence and style EMBEDDED QUOTATIONS Embedded Quotations: A part of a quotation that is integrated into the flow of your own sentence. Weave, embed, blend three small words that make all the difference! Embedded quotations require a LEAD IN Other wise you have a pluck and plop You need to set the context of your quote, this is known as

the LEAD IN and the 5Ws & H can help you do an effective one. Who? - Who are the person or persons involved in the story? What? - What happened? When? - When did it happen? Where? - Where did it happen? Why? - Why did it happen? How? - How did it happen? REMEMBER!!

Your writing should flow smoothly Your quoted material needs to be woven, blended, or embedded in your writing. MULTIPLE TYPES OF LEAD-INS 1. The Somebody Said quote Example: Jimmy cried, theres someone in the house! (Froehlich 11).

Simple, direct Fairly easy to incorporate Pluck and Plop: a quote that stands by itself Ex: Jimmy was startled. Theres someone in the house! (Froehlich 11). OTHER TYPES 2. The Blended Quote Provides more flexibility

Dont have to use entire quote What is retained blends in with your sentence reads as a complete statement without being awkward! Capitalization and punctuation of the original quotation may be changed to fit the structure of your sentence [use brackets]. Ex: Jimmy was alert, whispering [t]heres someone in the house and signaling to be quiet (Froehlich 11). FINALLY

3. The Sentence Lead-in Uses a colon to separate the lead-in Ex: Jimmy gestured to the others for silence, and spoke in a whisper: Theres someone in the house! (Froehlich 11). Honestly, this is barely better than a Pluck and Plop Avoid using it (its a cop-out) TONE

When analyzing literature, you should always use formal tone No abbreviations, texting terms, emoticons, etc. No shortened words: cant, wont, et al YOLO, OMG, J/K When in doubt, spell it out: cannot, will not

Titles are an exception: Mr., Mrs., St. TONE, CONTINUED Use the literary present! The convention in writing about literature or art is that the activities within a text, painting, or film are still happening in a continuous present. They are NOT events in history.

Wrong: Lennie was unaware of his strength. Right: Lennie is unaware of his strength. VOICE Always use third person voice!! No 1st or 2nd person (I, me, my, you, yours) Instead of you, use one (One must always remember to wash after using the restroom.)

This is part of maintaining a formal tone Avoid excess use of to be verbs They weaken writing: Harold is always looking to improve himself. Better: Harold continually looks to improve himself. FINALLYGAAACK!!! Do not begin an essay or thesis statement with any of the following phrases:

In this essay, I will write about The story I am going to write about is This is my essay on This book is about Similarly, do not end an essay with the following: This was my essay about I hope you liked my essay. The End

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